User:Tatiwaxman/Vegan Friendly/Genevieve McCann Peer Review

Lead Comments:

- Watch the tenses you use in the two major areas section because you use labeling and achieved one is present and one is past (could change the second bullet point to start with "executing innovative projects..."

- I'm not sure if the language in the last paragraph of the Lead section is appropriate for Wikipedia. I think you should mention the initiatives by Vegan Friendly without including words and phrases like "one of the most significant" and "successful" because these are subjective and your article should focus on facts. Maybe find data on how many people attended the festival to show that it was successful without saying it.

Vegan Friendly Label Comments:

Labeling Business:

- Ad "is" between "label" and "to" in the first sentence

- Could take out "serves as good information for for those who are Vegan." and go into the next sentence: "The Vegan Friendly Label gives people who are Vegan insight as to if the restaurant is a good choice, with plenty of options or not."

Labeling Products:

- Can probably take put also in this sentence: The "Vegan Friendly" label is also included within large marketing chains and various companies in the Israeli market.

- In this sentence change labels to labeled: The association conducts strictly organized tests of the products' components to make sure that they are accurately labels as "Vegan Friendly".

Projects Comments:

- Was "Fresh Fresh" advertised on radio, TV, or something else, I would just clarify that.

- Could you maybe find a quote or statistic to back up this sentence: "This project was watched by about a million Israelis and caused thousands of people to change their consumption habits."

- Change "The" to "They" in this sentence: "The also started operating in the USA in 2022."

- You used this information in the Lead section: "The company also holds an annual Vegan Fest, which is considered as the world's largest vegan festival": maybe you should add some different facts about the festival

Overall Nice Work! I enjoyed learning about Vegan Friendly

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