User:TayG1201/Meal kit/Jinie Ham Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm reviewing TayG1201's article- Meal Kit


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TayG1201/Meal_kit?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Meal kit

Evaluate the drafted changes
The two sentences that TayG added on the Lead introduce the outline of the further contents of the article which is helping readers to know what is coming next without scroll down all the way down of the page. TayG added one sentence under the Business category which is referencing about the current popular meal kit business- HelloFresh. In my opinion, create a sub-heading under the Business category and expand more of HelloFresh for more information or add other business brands that are popular for meal kit would be more informative. Adding an Environmental Impacts section on the article is great- to me since it's addressing about how meal kit services impact to the environment positively and how in-store grocery shopping has negative influence on environment; it sounds persuasive tone to me. for the Meal Kit User Experience- adding more reviews of the meal kit users be a good idea. overall, adding a new contents on the article definitely makes the articles more informative and insightful than the original one.