User:Taybledsoe/Childhood amnesia/Amonroyr Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Taybledsoe


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:Taybledsoe/Childhood amnesia - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Childhood amnesia - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Childhood amnesia - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
overall impressions

- I would recommend to start drafting in your sandbox even if it is just small notes that you wish to further discuss, questions that you have about the article, or even adding some sources that you might use.

- I would suggest looking into the personality section. There are not enough resources to support this section. What do first memories have that have such a significant impact on affecting one's personality? How does this statement tie back to childhood amnesia? This section suggests that detailed memory has a direct impact on how open a person is. However, the question is how does this relate to childhood amnesia? How could detailed memory be crucial to childhood amnesia? These are some questions to think about for this section. Perhaps you should remove that section and create one that is devoted to detailed memory instead.

- The section on ethnicity, culture, and society could also use some work. At the start of this section when it talks about Chinese participants it seems to focus more on the significance of female vs male memories. This could just be moved to the 'sex' section instead. I also do not see much evidence of the impact society has. The section is really vague and can easily be added to. For example, you could also include more about collectivist vs individualistic culture. These are a couple of examples that you can look into to further expand this section.

- The section 'individual differences' mentions how parenting styles can have an effect on childhood amnesia, but I see no mention of the different parenting styles and what each one has to contribute to childhood amnesia. This is something that you could further research and add to this section.