User:Tbeaisasn579779257/Ivan Paskevich/HIS346 Peer Review

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Tbeaisasn579779257


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 * User:Tbeaisasn579779257/Ivan Paskevich


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ivan Paskevich

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead: The lead has not been edited to include the content on the page, however the lead from the original article mainly discusses the military background on Ivan Paskevich, which involves the new content. Therefore, I do not see how the author could improve the lead without threatening its concise format.

Content: The author of this page does make note that all intended content is not yet on the page, but the existing content is relevant to the topic, and up to date. The "Personal Life" and "Awards" sections need to be further developed, as each simply holds hyperlinks to other Wikipedia pages holding related content. The "Awards" section would be greatly improved if the author were to describe each award, why Paskevich was awarded it, and the date of when the award was given. Each section could definitely benefit from more content, except for the "Russo-Persian War" and "Death" sections which seems to be complete. The "Hungary Revolution" and the "Polish Uprising" sections can significantly lengthened, perhaps with information such as Paskevich's stations, and brief background information on the conflict. It may also be helpful for the author to search for more information about Paskevich's political opinions.

Sources and References: The author only has one source for this page, and is referencing two different pages in the same source. There is also no source link included. A significant error is that the author has a hyperlink to the Paskevich family in the "Early life" section, but the page does not exist. The author needs many more sources, but the one listed appears to be a peer-reviewed primary source.

Organization: The page is organized very well, but there are minor grammatical and spelling errors. For example, in both the "Napoleonic War" section and the "Russo Persian War", the author has referential pronouns with no explanation to whom the author is referring. The author can sometimes be unclear with the use of pronouns, and may be a bit too concise with sentence length. It seems that the author is relying a little too heavily on other wikipedia pages as resources throughout this page, where there should instead be a brief statement or summary of the information pertinent to this page. It can be easily seen how this new content will be added to the existing page.

Overall Quality: The overall quality of this page is not bad, as the information is applicable and organized. The author needs to develop the page more with additional information, more sources, and to fix minor grammatical issues, but the page is not bad by means.