User:Tbeaisasn579779257/Pavel Nakhimov/ToriTrouble Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tbeaisasn579779257


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tbeaisasn579779257/Pavel_Nakhimov?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pavel Nakhimov
 * Pavel Nakhimov

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Looks like a good start, but perhaps summarize the content in two or three more sentences to provide a brief overview of the complete article rather than just his name and position. Also, I'm not sure how to do this myself but reformatting the content bar that would appear (I think you can enter the source code for the existing article and copy paste it and then edit it, or do it with another article with the same sections as you would have).

Content and Tone

Overall content is relating to the topic and well written in a formal and explanatory way. Perhaps develop a bit more the context surrounding the events (such as the battles) instead of just linking to it and describing it in half a sentence (to provide a better readership experience instead of having to jump between articles). You could use some of the sources in those linked to articles to develop a brief context for it. Overall the style and structure seems just like that of a well crafted wikipedia article, but the text should be developed a bit more to avoid simply jumping between events.

Sources and References

Sources and References seem of an adequate amount for the topic and come from generally reputable sources. References are well cited throughout the new text and are in the proper notation, but perhaps check to see if some of the citations can be hyperlinked, there might be something off in the source code since almost nothing the citation is in blue (ex. RusNavy.com). Add a bibliography section in addition to the references section would be beneficial as well, or include a "further reading" section for the benefit of the reader. Additionally, a "further information" link could be added to the relevant text sections to guide the reader to the relevant battles, etc.

Images and Media

Good use of images and media throughout, just check the source code to make sure they are in the right place. I've found that the wikipedia articles on source codes are a better help than the sections in the training modules, as they contain a source code template in a list so that you can just copy the ones relevant to what you need into your sandbox source code and simply edit the urls and such.