User:Tdl120300/Whale vocalization/Buginajar Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tdl120300


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tdl120300/Whale_vocalization?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Whale vocalization

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Seems untouched for the most part which is fine because the lead in this particular article is well developed. I do suggest that if you add the section on research (which i think is a great idea) then you should add a sentence addressing it in the lead or even give specific reference to research in some places where it says "it has been suggested".

Content: I think the content you have added in other sections is great and helps tie in some important information. The new section you are purposing seems like a great idea to me! obviously as a university student we can especially appreciate when research is acknowledged. Having a section dedicated to explain how these whale calls are found/recorded and classified will be great and will help tie up all the "it has been suggested' and "research has found" kind of acknowledgments throughout the article. I also see you cleared up all the citations needed for the purpose section, however this could use a little grammar editing. I'm seeing some small mistakes like in the following sentence "This cooing like noise made by the whales is one of the many everyday noises that whales, this is a noise to relax their young" where you can see there is either some information missing before the comma or this sentence just needs a little rewording. Otherwise the content you're adding looks great!

Sources: Like I mentioned above, you are already cleaning up some citation mishaps in the article and that's great to see! Make sure that all concrete statements have citations, seems like you are doing well at this but I would suggest maybe adding a citation to the last sentence of the research section (i.e., the sentence makes a statement about researcher Mark MacDonald), you likely have the source for this but accidently missed citing it on the draft page! If you have time (and perhaps you have already planned for this) there are some other sections in the article that are in need of citations such as the Odontocete whale, human interaction and song sections. Likely in your research to add your information you have come across citations needed for these other sections and therefore it could be a quick fix!

Overall: I think you are doing some great work to tie up any missing information and loose ends in the article. Your contribution will have this article well on its way toward completion. Keep up the great work and I look forward to seeing that research section getting added!

Good Luck ~ Buginajar