User:Tdl120300/Whale vocalization/Coffeebeangirl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tdl120300


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tdl120300/Whale_vocalization?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Whale vocalization

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead section is already very well developed. I don`t see any room for improvement here.

Content

The section on "other whale sounds" right now is plagiarized as the text is copied and pasted directly from the existing article. There are two paragraphs removed from this section that I believe are important. I would suggest finding the scientific literature for the citations needed. The "purpose of whale-created sound" paragraph looks good. You have added some relevant information and new sources. There is still at sentence in the published article that is not cited so it would be great if you could find scientific literature to cite that sentence. I also think the short paragraph at the end of that section is important to include. The section you marked as new is great but it comes directly from the article. I would make a new section but wouldn't change any of the text because it is very easy to understand as it is written in the published article. The other interesting information is great. I would include that in sections that are already created.

Tone/Balance, Organization and Images/Media are all great from the published article

Sources and References

The link for the whale song reference from cs.mcgill.ca is bringing me to a computer science faculty page. This is not a great resource to use for scientific referencing. Also you have this reference listed twice. Your first reference "Lonely whale`s song..." is already used to the published article references so you do not need to add it again. Also, the link you have with this article brings me to a scientific newsletter website with an abstract, not the actual article. The article about the loneliest whale and the kids connection is not very long and doesn`t appear to be scientific literature. The whale song link takes me right to a wikipedia article. You can instead link this word rather than having it in the references section. The when whales speak for themselves article is great. Once again the why whales make sound article is just coming from a website and not a published journal or book.

Overall Impression

Overall, there is not much information added to this article. I would take a deep look into scientific literature and find some journal articles that may help you. Your content could be first improved by finding better sources and then incorporating that material into your article. Best of luck!