User:TeachTESOL/English-language learner/Kelsey.rakoczy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
1.How much scholarly evidence did the group use on the page?

Did they include at least three in-text citations?

'''The author uses three in-text citations. '''

What was the quality of the references?

'''The references are all journals that have been peer-reviewed. All articles relate to the topic of English-language learners. All new references are dated within the last 10 years.'''

Were summaries from the reference appropriate? (no plagiarism!)

'''Each new section added and referenced in the article enhances the overall topic of English-language learners. It may be helpful to write descriptions of each of the articles in your bibliography section.'''

2.How effectively did the group incorporate visuals into the page?

Did they include at least two images on the page and what was the quality of the images?

'''Two images are included. The first image adds to the section on the No Child Left Behind Act and is a photo of George HW Bush signing the act. The second photo is about technology usage in the classroom. I feel this photo does not add much to the article. It may be better to find images of students working on their devices. '''

3.How well written was the page?

Grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure

Right now, this is a run-on sentence: “It is also imperative that teachers understand the cultural background of their students in relation to education, because what might be incorrect in English, could be correct in one’s native language, which the student is then transferring to his/her first language to the second.”

Was the page written in a way that made it accessible for the public? (No jargon)

'''Avoid using “we” in “Often times in the classroom, we are asking our students to communicate complex ideas and translanguing helps students do this”. This may alienate your audience that is not teachers. '''

'''There is a whole section on No Child Left Behind, which is no longer in effect. It may be a good idea to change this section to past tense. I would like to know how the “Every Student Succeeds Act” may have changed the policy for ELL standardized testing.'''