User:Teague Sloane/Lux (soap)/Tygodin17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Teague Sloane


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Teague Sloane/Lux (soap)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lux (soap)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been edited. The lead for the article is clear and to the point. It includes a brief description of the article’s main sections which is basically just the history of Lux soap.

Good content on this page, it could be cleaned up and organized a little more. Add some headings. The content added is relevant to the topic and up to date.

The content added is neutral and there are not any biases in the article. A good job of adding to the majority of history of Lux, it goes along with the main article. The article does not attempt to persuade the reader.

The content added is supported by reliable secondary sources. The sources are current and the information taken from them are accurate. The sources are good, they are diverse and reliable.

The content added is clear and easy to read and follow. One grammatical error I found was when you said “both Lux Soap, the actresses, and the studios” it is not both, I would get rid of the word “both”. The organization could be helped by using headings and subheadings.

The content added definitely improves this article, it adds a lot of information throughout the whole article. The strengths of the content added is that is gives more insight on the history of Lux soap, each section in this article seemed to be lacking information.

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