User:Teddy0129/The personal is political/Lfsq22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Teddy0129


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Teddy0129/The_personal_is_political?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The personal is political
 * The personal is political

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I think that the lead is in good shape. I would add a line about the laws that were created and how third-wave feminist have adopted "The Personal is Political" in their movement, but the synopsis is very clear and concise.

Content:

Because of the technical malfunction, I don't know all the content that you were planning to add. From what I saw it is all relevant. I would suggest getting a few more recent academic sources since the one journal article in your sandbox seems to be from 1993. In the published page, the criticism's section explains countering viewpoints well which balances the piece.

Tone and Balance:

The writing has a very neutral and unbiased tone.

Sources and References:

I think that as you search for sources, it might be good to look at more recent articles from academic journals. Additionally, it may be good to look at works from authors from other marginalized communities to understand their perspective on this argument/idea.

Organization:

The content is well written. Because of the technical malfunction I am not sure what sections you plan to add, but the existing sections are very important to the concept.

Images:

The image on the page is a little difficult to interpret. I couldn't really make out the slogan of the sign which is an important part of the image.