User:Teddybear232323/Treatments for PTSD/Eternalruler Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Teddybear232323


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Teddybear232323/Treatments for PTSD
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Treatments for PTSD

Evaluate the drafted changes
I could not find any changes made by this editor but I thought that it would be useful to add the changes that I think would be helpful to improve the article overall. I think that swapping the first and second paragraphs of the lead would improve the readability of the article significantly. This section also needs to be edited to remove redundant information and make the lead a more cohesive document. I think that a rework/removal of the Alternate Therapies second would useful. It uses language that is not in-keeping with the non-biased tone that Wikipedia is striving for. Include some information regarding the lack of evidence for MDMA based treatment. Particularly the difficulties that come with using scheduled drugs in clinical setting since. Maybe change it to Unproven therapies. Also, some of the therapies have as little as a single line of information. Expanding these entries would go a long way to improve the article. The article lacks a well-defined organization structure and that makes reading it more difficult that it would be otherwise.