User:Teddyp1234/Axolotl/Caroleebaskin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Teddyp1234


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Teddyp1234/Axolotl?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Axolotl
 * Peer review of article Axolotl draft by user Caroleebaskin

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead was not updated, but after reading the article, it is clear that this is unnecessary as it already contains a concise introductory sentence, a brief description of the articles topics, and does not contain information that is not present in the article. Maybe you could add a sentence or two about axolotl behaviour just to tie it all together, but besides that the lead looks good. It is concise without being too overly detailed. The content is all very relevant to the topic and well organized. I would add a subheading under "Behavioural Tendencies" that says "social tendencies" just to match the other headings, "reproductive behaviour" and "feeding behaviour." This will create parallel structure and contribute to the overall aesthetics and organization of the article. The actual content looks good. The diction is clear and concise and each paragraph is about equal in length, thus each section appears equally important. Your draft uses a neutral tone and no biases were presented. All of the content in your draft is backed up with a reference, although the punctuation goes in front of the citation, not after. The sources used were thorough and current, and the draft content accurately reflect these sources. Under the "feeding tendencies" paragraph, I would try to add some sort of peer reviewed source. The website used as a source in this paragraph seems good, but adding another reliable source ensures that your article is balanced, attested, and doesn't rely heavily on a single point of view. I tried every link, and they all work! There are a couple grammatical and spelling errors throughout the draft. Some punctuation needs to be added, for example, a comma after the word "However" in the "behavioural tendencies" section. There's some parts of the draft that use the plural of axolotl when you are trying to express the axolotl's possession and vice versa, so keep an eye out and make sure you're using an apostrophe in the right context. The word "occurring" is also spelled wrong in the "behavioural tendencies" section. I think there's a lot of strengths of your draft and overall, your content will improve the quality of the existing article by getting it one step closer to completion. Great work!