User:Teemicail/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Remix Culture

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I'm personally fascinated by the concept of remix culture. As a musician, I can't help but recognize that every artist stands on the shoulders of every artist that came before them - to think that a chord progression or a melodic pattern is an original, unique composition that can be wholly-owned by a single individual is simply not the nature of music, culture, or humanity. Yet, modern laws are written as if this premise is fact. The result, is less sampling, or "remixing" of existing music, which hampers musical hybridization, and limits artists' creativity. My preliminary impression of remix culture is grounded, primarily, in music history, and supported by having viewed a web-series called Everything is a Remix. The concept of remix culture extends far beyond music, of course, but music is an excellent topic of focus to better understand remix culture, its influence, and benefits.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead Section: Clear and concise, introduces the general topic, but does not explicitly detail major sections of focus.

Content:


 * The "Effects on artists" subsection needs to be further developed. Section is currently used to briefly discuss memes. Should perhaps include instances of controversial remixing and the consequences felt by artists. I'm thinking of the song "Bittersweet Symphony" by the Verve, and its sampling of an orchestral arrangement of a song by The Rolling Stones, the ensuing legal battle, and the Verve's resulting loss of revenue, as an applicable example.
 * In the "Graphic arts" subsection, graffiti is discussed. The paragraph ends, "as example, Banksy is a notable contemporary English graffiti artist." Banksy should surely be mentioned, but should be more clearly tied to remixing ideas or backdrops, and not just an orphaned mention at the end of the paragraph.
 * The "Music" subsection can greatly be expanded. Very brief mention is made of rock n' roll music being influenced by blues, and the origins of hip-hop, but these topics could have much more developed sections specific to remix culture.
 * There is a subsection on "TikTok" that feels like it should be referencing social media applications in general, and their relationship to remix culture, rather than narrowing that focus only to the TikTok platform.
 * The subsection of "Remixing in religion" is underdeveloped. Millenia of acculturation and syncretism has been reduced to three sentences.
 * The "Copywrite" subsection may be benefited from including context for copywrite, and its original intent of providing patronage to artists. This topic can also be more fully developed in the "Criticism" subsection, which is not nearly substantive enough at present.

Tone/Balance:

As a proponent of remix culture, even I must admit that the criticisms of remix culture are not presented as in-depth as they should be in the article. More emphasis should be placed on patronage for artists, or lost revenue as a result of one's work being appropriated.

Sources:

There are nearly a hundred sources referenced, from a variety of credible outlets. Many sources, but more can be sourced from those and other articles.

Images:

The article includes a few images, and they appear to be used correctly. Additional examples of specific remixed art may be more beneficial than photos of IBM computers, however.

Talk Page:

The talk page is active and working to address issues on the article. Many edits have been made in recent months, and there is a collaborative effort among several Wiki Projects.

Writing/Structure:

Throughout the body of the article, there are a few instances of typos or incorrect sentence structure.


 * Within the "Intertwining of media cultures" subsection, this lines appears, "For example, students will pull images, text, and other information from various original sources a place in a presentable format, such as a slide presentation, in order to demonstrate understanding of material reviewed" and "Since media culture consumers start to look at art and content as something that can be repurposed or recreated, therefore they can become the producer." This section needs proofreading and revision.

Overall Thoughts:

This appears to be a solid article worthy of working on, that just needs a few improvements in providing fuller context in a few subsections, and may require a little revision and organization to allow for a more cohesive article.