User:Tegan190/Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area/Rachelswimmer Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username): Tegan190
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area


 * Remember you shouldn't capitalize every letter in your heading. Instead of "Social Determinants of Health" it should be "Social determinants of health"

Overall evaluation
Social determinants of health section:

The beginning of the article you say how social and environmental factors influence our health, and then go on to discuss the benefits of the nutritional WIC programme. You might want to add more information/research about what the social and environmental factors are and the ways in which they impact our health. However, the research from New York you are bringing in is also really interesting and relevant. It might be helpful to note more information on the effect nutrition has on our well-being.

Also... this line: "social and environmental factors effecting the mother" I believe should be 'affecting'

Addressing social determinants section:

The study from UCSF is really interesting. Perhaps it would also be important to include why patients are not connected with necessary social services when they do visit hospitals. Does race, gender, and culture play a factor in who does or doesn't receive the help they need? It might also be useful to add just what kind of services they might need. Domestic violence intervention? Information about nutrition? Mental health services? I think being more specific in this section will be beneficial to the reader. Homelessness in San Francisco The health impact of homelessness section:

Great research study from Census data as well as from Tulier.