User:Tennisplayer56/Deafness in Nicaragua/Redpanda2301 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tennisplayer56 (provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Deafness in Nicaragua

Content

 * Overall, I think your content is relevant and most of your citations are from the past 5 years.
 * I think that your language deprivation section could be cleaned up and made clearer by reorganizing it. For example, general information/statistics on the deaf population should come earlier in the lead section once you write that. I wasn't sure how relevant the study was to this section, but I'm sure you could justify it if you flesh the information out a bit more.
 * I'd like to know more about the hearing detection/prevention, even if there isn't a lot of information on this.

Tone and Balance

 * You did a great job maintaining a neutral tone, especially in the significant organizations section.
 * I did not find any heavily biased claims.

Sources and References

 * As I stated above, you did a great job finding recent sources for your article.
 * Are you able to find any sources that are written by deaf people in Nicaragua? You found a lot of great academic sources, but I think your article would be strengthened by finding some websites/news articles/etc. written by people that are deaf or organizations who work with deaf people.
 * I would try to keep the format of the citations the same. It was a bit hard to navigate your citation section.
 * The links I clicked all worked and took me to the proper websites.

Organization

 * Your information was well organized and easy to read.

New Articles

 * So far, you're meeting Wikipedia's notability requirements. As I said above, I think you could have a more diverse list of sources but did a good job finding relevant articles.
 * Nice job with linking your article to other Wikipedia articles!

Overall impressions

 * Your tone was neutral and you did a great job finding reputable sources.
 * I would add an early hearing detection/intervention section in order to strengthen your language deprivation section.
 * I'm looking forward to seeing you add other sections. Good start!