User:Tennisplayer56/Deafness in Nicaragua/Ren.Wall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tennisplayer56 (provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tennisplayer56/Deafness_in_Nicaragua?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deafness in Nicaragua

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
No Lead section drafted yet, but that will come later once other sections are complete.

Language Emergence Section
I would rephrase the first sentence of this section to say there was no known or declared deaf population. You go on to say that there were D/HH people, so don't completely eliminate them from existence in that first sentence. Well done identifying Nicaraguan sign language's origins and its status as a deaf community SL. If you can, include more details such as: Is it an official language of Nicaragua, do elder D/HH populations continue to use home signs or have people adapted to using NSL, are there any details about NSL like its relation to spoken language, etc.

Significant Organizations
Great section - thoughtful information provided on each of your organizations in a clear format. If you can, hyperlink the official websites of these organizations when you introduce them and see if you can find when the first two organizations were formed. Overall great use of detail in this section!

Language Deprivation
I like your inclusion of the experiment - it is specific to Nicaraguan SL and the effect of language deprivation on their deaf population at various ages. I would only separate this section from your discussion of hearing parents using gestures/home signs to keep it organized by topic. In your first paragraph, if you can, be more specific about the lack of access to special education: too expensive? lack of schools? lack of teachers? is it regional? does it come from societal/cultural pushback? Also I am very curious about the gestures used by hearing people - are these like home signs or are they universal across hearing populations in Nicaragua? What kind of gesture are there? Do they almost mimic SL or is there a relationship to NSL or are they independent?

Other Notes
Overall, well done. Good use of citations, and you have a nice list of 10 seemingly reliable resources. Your language is neutral, you have some use of hyperlinks I think you could include more, and grammatically looks good. Well done!