User:Terrapin2022/Killing of Johnny Robinson/123abcd4567 Peer Review

General info
Terrapin2022
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Terrapin2022/Killing of Johnny Robinson :
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Killing of Johnny Robinson

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

-Lead kept the same from the original article, but original still captures any additional information added

-Lead is concise; overall, feels appropriate

Content:

-Added content is relevant & up-to-date

-Deals with members of historically underrepresented population

Tone & balance:

-Content added is relatively neutral

-Nature of the paper may lead to be favored towards Robinson, however this is more to do with what happens than how the article is written

Sources & References:

-References are relevant

-some links don't work on the current version of the article (might mean that some sources are outdated)

-sources are thorough & represent different view points

Organization:

-organization of the body was a bit confusing; restructuring or spending more time explaining certain things could increase clarity (for example, the switch from the 16th st. bombing to Robinson's death felt sudden & therefore was slightly confusing)

-sections make sense

Overall impressions:

-new content adds more detail; more could still be added

-strengths: information added creates clearer picture of events described

-improvements: could add more new references & try switching up the structure of the original article more