User:TerrenceLY/Jan Gay/Ellabogomilsky Peer Review

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 * User:TerrenceLY/Jan Gay
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The lead is well-written. I think that it provides a nice concise overview of Gay and also provides a brief overview for the different sections of the article. I do think that the introductory sentence could be improved -- specifically to include what Gay advocated for/what she did research on.

I think that the content added to the article is sufficient as well, and is pretty neutral. One thing that I will note, which connects to the sources and references, is that some of the sections, specifically. the research section, have information that is primarily from one source. I know that it may be difficult to find sources about some feminists but I think that this article could benefit from a larger variety of sources. Regardless, it seems like all of the sources in the article are reliable and current. I do also think that the tone of the article can be a tad informal at times, so maybe just rephrasing certain sentences to make them a little more neutral would be beneficial.

The only other aspect of this article that I could see being improved would be regarding organization. I think that this article could benefit from a little info box with maybe a photo, where the person was born, etc. just to have a little summary of the person's basic info. I also think that the research section of the article could benefit from being split into two sections with separate subheadings under research, maybe in chronological order.

Overall, I think that this article is great and that there has been an abundance of relevant information included to start this article. I also like that there are multiple other wikipedia pages linked to make the page more discoverable. Good job!