User:TessGoldenthal/Allyship/PatrickHardner Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tess Goldenthal


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a very well-written article and I can honestly say I learned a lot about the background of allyship after reading your work. Please consider my peer-review comments as constructive, as that is the point of the assignment. I will be utilizing the six guiding questions from the previous module to format this review. I am generally positive when it comes to reviews, as I believe this is the best way to move forward, as opposed to negative criticism (which you will not find here).


 * 1) Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * 2) After reading your article draft, I agree that everything is relevant. I believe the introduction provides a great context related to the definition of allyship, and this benefits your article overall. My only critique related to distractions is that the background section is close to the end of the article and a lot of the same information is provided in the introduction. My guess is that, since this assignment is roughly halfway done, you will add more throughout the remainder of the semester. Overall, all the information appears relevant and I think it looks great!
 * 3) Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * 4) Although this article is relatively neutral, I believe there are minute elements of bias throughout the "Criticism" section (but in my opinion, this is difficult to avoid with this topic). It is clear that you are very passionate about this issue, and that is evident through your writing. As an author of an article related to allyship, of course I would expect you to be biased in one way. The most important thing is to prevent this from providing a full spectrum of knowledge related to this issue. Fortunately, you did not let any opinions prevent you from doing so, so great job! :)
 * 5) Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * 6) Similar to the prior question, I believe you provided adequate background on all viewpoints related to this issue. However, for the sake of this assignment, I must suggest that the viewpoints of those in support of allyship are slightly overrepresented, but for similar reasons described above, I think you did a great job. You also provided a great background on the related social justice movements, so I say good job!
 * 7) Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * 8) The links do in fact work! Based on the titles of the sources, I would assume that they support the claims in your article. We are William and Mary students, thus I would guess we know how to cite sources. I'll use my best judgement and trust you on this!
 * 9) Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * 10) Yes, you do an excellent job at providing appropriate, reliable references. This information comes from a variety of sources, as the assignment indicates (scientific scholarship, popular press, additional Wikipedia articles). For the most part, I would assume these are neutral sources, as each journal has requirements for submission. You note the biases very well, as your article has very relevant information cited from these sources.
 * 11) Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added?
 * 12) The only thing I would add is additional information after the "Criticism" section, as I mentioned in questions 1 and 2 above. I feel like the background is too close to the end, but I also would assume that you plan on adding additional sections throughout the remainder of the semester. I look forward to reading a finished draft of your article, as you are currently in a great spot in my opinion!

Best,

-Pat Hardner