User:Tesseractionable/Anti-Western sentiment/Slatercp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Tesseractionable


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tesseractionable/Anti-Western_sentiment?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Anti-Western sentiment

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello there!!

Looking at the original article, it needs a lot of work! There's not a lot of balance between the key points and the lead into the article is very to the point without much elaboration at all. It's surprising that it's like this though because there's a considerable amount of citations listed below. My first suggestion would be to access the current citations or even add more in hopes to elaborate on a lot of the ideas here. It seems like the ideas are sold, but there's little evidence or explanation as to how, why, or what exactly is going on. I would definitely focus a lot of attention towards the lead of the article because that is what is going to be the most attractive to your reader. As noted by the WIki-manager, it states that there's little citations within the article. Make sure that when you're writing your additions that you include the citations so that readers know where the information is coming from. There also seems to be a considerable amount of information on Mainland China as opposed to the other examples. I suggest that you invest time on the other examples and try to provide the same amount of information on each one. My last piece of advice would be to add more pictures, cited and explained of course. This will attract more readers as well as make your information seem more credible with visual examples to back them up.

Looking at your sandbox and your additions to the article, I noticed you've managed to add a lot more sources and are even using JSTOR. These are very good and are going to help your article a lot in the long run. In considering to your in text citations, I would look into your format when citing from JSTOR for in text because the numbers seem a bit odd. I'm sure you can alter that to make it more reader friendly and formally correct with MLA or APA. Overall, it seems like you have a good general direction and have added many sources and even a few new ideas to the article. I would suggest spending more time on the lead, adding more to the other examples other than mainland china, and fixing your citations. Other than that, it looks like you're on your way to a great wiki article contribution!