User:Tgtg1234/Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park/Aadibatahseen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tgtg1234/Tweedsmuir_South_Provincial_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Firstly, as per the original introduction of the article and the history, I do not see much of a change and it looks like they are the same and no editing was done. Both these segments could use more information. An addition of information that would be useful in the history segment is how the land has been harvested what sort of species are there now as opposed to before, migration of animals. There should also be some information on what resources were used and how much by whom and how this all has affected the creation and well-being of the protected area.

For the conservation I like the new addition of the first nations and acknowledging their territorial domain. The information in this segment is quite important as the initial article only mentions it. I appreciate how you wrote about a species found in the park and about its significance towards the first nations in that area and how it both culturally and environmentally impacts them. You also added the information of jurisdiction of the park on the government and the management process that includes first nations involvement. I do not however see more information on the goals and reasons of this area being a protected place so that information would be essential to this wikipedia article.

The ecology section for this edit has been expanded a lot from the original article which is quite important for a park as it is vital information about the species and environment this park is habituated in. It establishes the boundary of the park properly. There is ample amount of information on the species of animals, flora and fauna. I also admire the fact you mentioned there are no endemic species but added a link to endemic species in Canada as a whole. Climate changed and threats impact have also been included in this part which will allow readers to grasp an idea of why this is a protected place. Number of visitors as well as their activity breakdown is also included.

There is not much information about whether the goals for the protected area have been met since it became protected nor what steps are being taken to achieve the goal.

The threats have just been jotted down on the article, but an explanation of how each threat is working against the protected place would be more useful information as it would not generalize the threats but rather give an idea of how bad the situation is for this place and what people who visit it should be aware of. I also notice that you linked the "Nuxalk Nation" at the very end in your recreational activities segment, however putting that link earlier in the article would be better especially in the first nations segment where you initially talk about it.

I see you used few resources and attached some links however putting in more references could further strengthen your article. You could also attach a link from the british columbia government site regarding the first nations mentioned. The sites also look trustworthy and are credible sources for the information as well.

The article itself is easy to understand and communicates the information very well. It is easy for readers to grasp the concept and ideas of this park and you have expanded on the already available information present currently on the article which is very good. Over all if the problem areas are acknowledged then this would be a great wikipedia article that can communicate a lot of information to its readers.