User:Tgtg1234/Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park/Popv!p Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tgtg1234 & Group (ZoeMarielK, Natashasing987, Dvdw3)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tgtg1234/Tweedsmuir_South_Provincial_Park?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think the content of the article is informative but in it's current state maybe a little sparse. Excellent base to work off of though. I think it does a good job of specifically going into details regarding each of the endangered species within it's bounds. I also liked the details regarding the Nuxalk Nation in the First Nations and Conservation section, as they are clearly an important part of the land's history. Details regarding recreation in the area and the involvement of the Nuxalk Nation in creating the signage were also interesting. I particularly liked that the Indigenous peoples of the are were mentioned in multiple section. I think a lot of the sources are good, I like federal and provincial sources are they are generally specific to the areas in question, if the group is looking for some more peer reviewed academic articles the university library catalogue might have some on conservation by independent researchers on the species that live in Tweedsmuir South Provincial Park.

Goals of the assignment that I can see being met are:


 * The number of visitors to the protected area, and what they do there - under the "Number of visitors" section
 * Information about First Nations whose traditional and ancestral territory/ies are included in the protected area - under the "First Nations and Conservation" section
 * Information about any species that are endemic - under the "Endemic Species" subsection
 * Identification of any species at risk in the protected area, and information about their population trends, if available - under the "Endangered Species & Conservation section
 * Information about what species can be found in the protected area (plants, animals, other species) - under the "Habitat and Biodiversity" section

While these goals are being addressed I think they could be improved upon with more information and details, for example the "Endemic Species" subsection says that there are some that live there but doesn't elaborate on any in particular. I think adding some examples or a list might make the subsection more informative and better meet the assignment goal being addressed.

In the "Habitat and Biodiversity" section there are lots of very little paragraphs that I find a bit difficult to read, maybe some of them could be combined, or broken up by some out of article links. Many species of fish are mentioned in this section and I'm sure Wikipedia has a number of articles touching on them. I would be great to have a link to further reading.

Overall I like the organization of the Ecology section and think it could maybe be replicated elsewhere, if that's a theme the group likes writing in. In other places some of the heading separations don't make a lot of sense to me, I think this might be just because of how the group divided up the work. But I don't think the "Number of visitors" needs such a big header, or any at all, it would likely fit nicely as just another paragraph under "Recreation". Additionally it might be relevant to put the "First Nations and conservation" section under history and before the region's colonial past as it happened chronologically first. I understand that conservation doesn't really fit under "History" and could maybe have it's own subsection in the "Endangered Species and Conservation" umbrella.

Great Work!