User:ThaiMilkTea/Central Valley (California)/LeoAHearl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emmayoun9


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ThaiMilkTea/Central_Valley_(California)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Central Valley (California)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Emma's article is coming along well. The topic connects to the course and the writing is pretty unbiased. I helped her fix some phrasing and grammar within the article. It seems to be well cited and relevant, since she is using data from the last ten years. She just needs to add more to the article. She plans on writing more about the effects of droughts in the central valley as well as other harmful effects of excessive rainfall. I think that works really well for the project because of our state's history with droughts.