User:ThatOnePerson25/Karen Nussbaum/Egstruck22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Myown3arth and ThatOnePerson25


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ThatOnePerson25/Karen_Nussbaumveaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Karen Nussbaum - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content added to the Wikipedia page was neutral and showed no bias. We couldn't find anything that was leaning to the perspective of Karen Nussbaum and praising her, they simply added the information needed without showing any favoritism towards her.
 * Has the content added improved the quality the overall quality of the article?
 * The content added improved the overall quality of the article as they added a section for her achievements which is nice to recognize what she is notably known for doing. They organized the information into a more appealing nature and set it up nicely. It is more accessible from the outside to recognize quick facts about Nussbaum.
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes, all information added was well-written and it was added concisely as well as it is easy to read. They provided much needed organization for the page, before it was a long essay written about her life in a boring unappealing way. They did a great job of making a chart recognizing her accomplishments and added much needed headings to organize information making it easier to read, as well as adding information about her efforts in 9to5 which was unbiased and clear.