User:ThatOneYCStudent/Noonday Demon/Springwater01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ThatOneYCStudent


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ThatOneYCStudent/Noonday Demon - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Noonday Demon - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The bibliography has sources that seem credible from articles from organizations. The last source could be more credible since it comes from a .com article. I would suggest looking at an online database to find a more credible source for your article. I would suggest trying to add in text citations to your article because it seems like it lacks a few of them. I would also try to expand on this topic by maybe including some examples or stories about this topic, or how it is relevant in present day. Your article lacks headings and subheadings, I would focus on adding those along with more information about the myth. I would try to put additional credible sources in your article and make sure to cite them properly. It is good to continue adding in text links to other articles for clarification. I would also try to expand the first paragraph since it is only two sentences long. Try to put information about what the rest of the article will look like. I would add in a better transition from the first and the second paragraphs. Your article does a good job of staying unbiased, try to keep with that same language.