User:The.Jeremiah02/Sonic Boom of the South/Court.pow2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

The.Jeremiah02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:The.Jeremiah02/Sonic_Boom_of_the_South/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sonic Boom of the South

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: There isn’t a lead in your Wikipedia article draft. It would be good to include one that gives a good summary of what you are about to inform the reader about.

Content: The historical content you include is very good and all relevant to the topic. However, there were some details that could have been left out. Such as the sentence “SBOTS performing at the 2013 Southern Heritage Classic.” This is relevant but awkward in its placement, so I would just say to adjust where it is in the article. I really liked the section that’s specifically about their marching style because it’s something that defines them.

Tone and Balance: Your tone is very good throughout and fits within the Wikipedia standards.

Sources and References: So far there isn’t a references section so I can’t see if the sources are good.

Organization: I like that you organized the history section into paragraphs that were initially separated by the replacement of the school’s president. Though, the transition between paragraphs 4 and 5 could be smoother. I also really liked your section for notable events. It helps the reader to quickly see what they’re known for. Furthermore, I would suggest adding a notable alumni section.

Images and Media: There aren’t currently any pictures so I would suggest adding some that can help to elevate the article and represent more about the Sonic Boom of the South.

Overall: I believe this is a really good draft. It needs some adjusting with the placement of certain things in the history section and would be improved by the addition of a few sections. Nevertheless, I really enjoy what you have so far.