User:The.Jeremiah02/Sonic Boom of the South/Thouston7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

the.jeremiah02


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:The.Jeremiah02/Sonic_Boom_of_the_South/Bibliography?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is no lead section at the beginning. Try adding one. You won't have to do any extra work; all you need to do is summarize you article. The content is relevant. It talks about the style, history, and past events of the marching band. The draft addresses the gap of African American music. The draft is neutral throughout and isn't biased. You are missing a reference section. Where are you getting your information from? It does not look you are using citations. It is recommended that you use one to two citation in each section. It is well written, clear, and concise. You should go into more detail in your notable events. Try describing the events and maybe adding dates. Please look into adding at least two pictures to your draft.

So far so good. Keep in mind these minor suggestions while you continue to draft.