User:TheA04/Potter's wheel/Lee3629 Peer Review

General info
TheA04
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3ATheA04%2FPotter%27s_wheel&diff=1186996762&oldid=1186995803
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Potter's wheel

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the strongest part of your addition to the article is the added new content. Not only does it expand some of the talking points/discussion of the existing article, but also introduces discussion abut industrialization and the social issues surrounding the Potter's wheel. The non-western history inclusion fits nicely well within the class content (about overlooked groups of people(s)). Initially, it was just a mention of possible history. For wiki assignments, your tone goes along with the neutral tone and factual content. You have a good amount of references, some of which are peer reviewed papers or from well-established historical sources. Overall, your sandbox looks great.

note: you may want to check your citations in your references. There's a date warning under ref 11 (Mishima, Yasuo (1955-10).)