User:TheCrystalHermitCrab/Dave Pelzer/RAT1981 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TheCrystalHermitCrab


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:TheCrystalHermitCrab/Dave Pelzer


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dave Pelzer

Evaluate the drafted changes
I see that you have already moved your work over further. But I do like your addition about Pelzer's current life overall. You should consider editing the lead to include the information that you have added. If possible, it may be interesting to give some detail about where he is, and his family if he has any. Overall you did well though!