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Analysis of Article
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Reading List
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 * Author’s name. (Date). Short title.
 * Bayum, Nina & Robert S. Levine. (2012). The Norton Anthology American Literature: Volume A, pg. 445-448
 * http://litfit.webs.com/Samson%20Occom.pdf
 * http://www.christianity.com/church/church-history/timeline/1701-1800/samson-occom-american-indian-ordained-11630268.html
 * http://nativeamericanwriters.com/occum.html
 * http://historymatters.gmu.edu/d/5788
 * http://college.cengage.com/english/lauter/heath/4e/students/author_pages/eighteenth/occommohegan_sa.html
 * http://www.jstor.org/stable/1183629?seq=1#page_scan_tab_contents
 * http://www.encyclopedia.com/topic/Samson_Occom.aspx

Revised paragraph from article
Bold text====Original==== Copy and paste an original paragraph from your Wikipedia article here. Early life and education Born to Joshua Tomacham and his wife Sarah, Occom is believed to be a direct descendant of Uncas, the notable Mohegan chief. In 1743 at the age of 20, Occom heard the teachings of Christian evangelical preachers in the Great Awakening. He began to study theology at the "Lattin School" of Congregational minister Eleazar Wheelock in 1743 and stayed for four years until leaving to begin his own career. In addition to improving his English, Occom learned to read and speak Hebrew. As a young man, the only book he owned was the Bible. From 1747 until 1749, Occum worked under and studied with the Reverend Solomon Williams in New London, Connecticut.

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Your revised paragraph goes here. Early life and education Occom was born in Heathen and raise from Heathenism by his father Joshua Tomacham and his wife Sarah at Mohegan, in New London, Connecticut. Occom is also believed to be a direct descendant of Uncas,[4] the notable Mohegan chief. At 10 years old, a man would search for young native kids among the Indian Wigwams. This man would go out of his way to teach Indian children how to read. Most of the children including Occom tried to avoid the man but would sometimes get caught. When Occom was 16, he had heard of rumors from white people concerning of ministers and preachings. Preachers came to visit Occom in turn went to there meetings and churches where later he was "Awakened". He converted to Christianity under James Davenport who's a colleague with Eleazar Wheelock. This made Occom the second generation in his family being converted to Christianity, his mother being the first. This peaked at Occom's interest in Christianity further more and helped him discover salvation through Jesus Christ after being converted. Occom began learning and teaching himself English, sometimes asking his English neighbors for help and assistance. He had a desire for learning and started to read the bible for the words of god. In 1743 at the age of 20, Occom heard the teachings of Christian evangelical preachers in the Great Awakening. He began to study theology at the "Latin School" of Congregational minister Eleazar Wheelock in 1743[5]. Occom had information of Wheelock having a number of english youth under his tution, thinking if he could go with Wheelock to instruct him in his reading. Occom went with Wheelock thinking that he would end up being gone for a short while when in reality he was gone for 4 years over seas. He improved his English, also learned to read and speak Hebrew.The only book he owned was the Bible. His health would be impaired from the amount of reading he did during the course of 4 years. It put a strain on his eyes and had to discontinue from his studies. From there, Occom went out to find employment from the Indians. He traveled back to Mohegan and heard some of his people where moving to Montauk, Long Island and went on to teach beginning his career as a teacher. During which from 1747 until 1749, Occum worked under and studied with the Reverend Solomon Williams in New London, Connecticut.

Original Contribution
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As a teacher, Samsom Occom