User:TheFrenchFry/Robot-assisted surgery/DonKeyamp Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TheFrenchFry


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Robot-assisted surgery
 * Robot-assisted surgery

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you did a good job overall. Expanding the areas to include more than just one sentence was a great addition. Everything that you added is easy to follow with few run-on or grammatical errors. It was neutral and not heavily biased.


 * 1) If I am looking at this article as a novice to medicine, I would have a few questions.
 * 2) In the uses section, there is heavy jargon usage without explanation especially in regards to surgery types and diagnosis.  This is in most of the uses and not just those you added.  Those that have wiki-links embedded likely have a description if someone holds their cursor over the link.  It would be useful to the average reader to have a small clause (nephrectomy, kidney removal surgery,) or a link to another wikipedia article for the reader.  It keeps them from having to do a deep dive on every medical word.
 * 3) In comparing all of the different usage sections, I noticed that most not only did they describe the different robots but also diagnosis and surgeries.
 * 4) Bone section, is it used on anything besides just hips and spines?
 * 5) Pediatric surgeries, why are the surgeries done for which diagnosis?
 * 6) Overall the sections seem as though they may be better placed in a different order: History, Comparison to traditional, then usage.  This might be a personal idea of flow and maybe better fleshed out on the talk page.

Overall job well done.