User:TheMarshmallow5/Ares/Koolkat646 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TheMarshmallow5


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TheMarshmallow5/Ares?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ares

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello! For the peer review I'm just going to go down the list of things mentioned above in the peer review box, I noticed you don't have a lot of information down in your sandbox for the article but you've got a start so that's great. Because there's not much to go off of in your sandbox this will probably be quite short with very little feedback but I'd be happy to check back in further down the line and/or if I'm assigned to again lol

*Lead

~There's no lead written, not much feedback to give.

*Content

~There were a couple additions that were relevant to the topic and added more detail to what was there but there were also additions just focusing on wording and grammar, I'd start focusing more on adding nice chunks of new information to the article, whether it's completely new or just enhancing what might already be there. I'm not exactly sure how much we are supposed to be adding to these articles but the more information and bugger chunks of writing you can add to the article the better.

*Tone and balance

~Nothing to add here

*Sources and references

~In your bibliography everything is in order the way it should be so that works good, I am curious though if that's the name of the resource (article, book, ect.) of your first reference? Also, I believe there should also be links to those references attached below them so not only you can easily refer back to them but so that the professor and your peer reviewer can check them as well.

~Make sure to add citations to the information you're adding to the article, for example:

Add to a subsection of Aphrodite: "Later, the god of romantic love, Eros, was born from Ares and Aphrodite's love. Even though they weren't supposed to see each other, the lovers broke the rule and had seven more children." Cite where this information came from. I'll link the training module for citing because it gives you step by step instructions on how to do the in text citations. https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/training/students/sources

*Organization

~Nothing to add here

*Images and media

~Nothing to add here

*Overall impressions

~ Your article definitely needs some work, but that's mostly because there's not much there yet. I still have quite a bit of work to do myself so I hope you don't take any of this personally I just wanted to provide real feedback. That being said I think your biggest areas of growth are your references and citations and the amount of information that still needs to be added to your sandbox for the article. Good luck!