User:TheWittyOwls/Skunk City/Hudson1521 Peer Review

General info
(Olivia Valcourt, TheWittyOwls)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:TheWittyOwls/Skunk City
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Skunk City

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) Great sections. Will need a lead eventually but it should be easy to pick the most important information from the sections to include in it.
 * 2) This is super picky and isn't actually important, but in the demographics section I don't think you have to include the leading words in the sentence (Regarding marital status, racially, economically). I think that the information that follows already implies what you're reporting on without you actually having to state it.
 * 3) "The median income is $28,750, also two-thirds of the Syracuse figure." I might elaborate just a little bit more on what you're saying. What Syracuse figure? I know it could be assumed based on context, but if someone were only looking at this sentence it's beneficial for them to clearly understand what you are saying.
 * 4) Overall, I think you guys did a great job at taking an article that had basically nothing and turning it into something more substantial. There isn't any bias in the article, but many of the sentences were written in the same style you might write a paper (understandable since that's what we mainly do). I would recommend going through and rewriting certain sentences so they are just very plainly providing information without extra wording. If you guys could find visual elements, such as photos of landmarks, those would be good to include as well. There is a very good amount of information, if you guys do find more it never hurts to add it in. The article looks really good so far and you guys made great progress on it!