User:The Silvarius/Splatoon 2: Octo Expansion/Phil the Human Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

The Silvarius


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:The%20Silvarius/Splatoon_2:_Octo_Expansion?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Splatoon 2: Octo Expansion

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: New sections added with more information, specifically "Music" and "Release" with an updated "Gameplay" section. Article sections give a good overview, but organization might need to change. I would add the "Gameplay" section before the "Music" section. There are a few typos, mainly "completesaid" in the third sentence and "trailor" in the first sentence of the "Release" section. These sections overall make good additions and include content that is relevant and gives more depth to the article.

Sources: Good sources that are up-to-date. My only issue is the Nintendo of Japan tweet used as a source. While a tweet may be a usable source, I would look for a press release from Nintendo if one is available. Adding a few more citations would also help, notably in the "Music" section. Adding more links in the text would help give the reader context as well.

Overall: With some minor structural tweaks, I think this would make a great addition to the original article! Information benefits the article and is clear.

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