User:The Tim Smith/sandbox

Editing Plan

Stanford marshmallow experiment

The Stanford Marshmallow Experiment (Editors Jamie and Abril)

Things to refine on article (the assigned person will be in parentheses):

1.    Confirm citations. For example, the article refers to the 1972 study but Citation 1 references the 1970 study. I think it would be beneficial if time permits to double-check each citation for accuracy. (Jamie)

UPDATE: Added a hyperlink to a 1988 Mischel and colleagues follow-up study (Abril)

2.    Spelling and grammar. Do a clean-up on awkward and clumsy sentences. There are also a few areas that are redundant - such as multiple mentions of the number of participants in the 1970 study. (Abril).

UPDATE: The intro paragraph, origins portion, and follow up of the article has been revised (for grammatical errors). Also introduced subheadings to make the article flow better and more understandable (participants, procedures, conditions, results). ALL paragraphs have been revised for grammatical errors.

3.    Differentiate between the various studies that were conducted regarding delayed gratification. The article conflates several studies and blends the findings. Specifically detail the exact study or delete references to other studies that are irrelevant to the wiki page.

UPDATE: Done by Jamie

4.    Possibly add some hyperlinks; Body Mass Index (BMI), animal cookies , pretzel , University of Rochester. (Jamie - done)

UPDATE: Added hyperlinks throughout article. No further action needed.

5.    Possibly delete useless links such as opaque cake tin. It is actually two different links. "Opaque" send you to the "Opacity (optics)" wiki page and "cake" sends you to a pastry page. (Jamie -done)

UPDATE: These links have been deleted, useful links have been added to article. No further action needed.

6.    Look into adding a PDF version of the 1970 and 1972 studies in the references section. I noticed this feature on citation 5 and think it is a great idea. Not sure of any legalities involved though. (Abril - done)

UPDATE: No further action needed.

7.    Look into the use of the term "deferred gratification" that is used in the current article. I am not sure that term is interchangeable with "delayed gratification"- the term used in the original studies. It may possibly be used, and I do not remember it. A quick scan of the PDF copies can let us know. (Jamie- done - it was used in 1970 study but not in 1972 study)

UPDATE: Article was scanned and decided to separate by different articles (1970 and 1972). No further action needed.

8.    Make two new references changes each. Deleted Mischel (1958) and added Klineberg (1968), Mischel and Gilligan (1964), and Shybut (1968) (done)

UPDATE: References have been added. No further action needed.

Price Comments
Nice job. Very thorough. Make sure there are at least a couple good "chunks" of text that you add or revise. Paul C Price (talk) 17:59, 28 October 2019 (UTC)