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Article Evaluation
Renée Kahane

Evaluating Content


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * What else could be improved?


 * 1) There are a few sentences in this article that are out of place, or irrelevant. For instance, in the 'Career' section, it reads:  'Following Henry's brief imprisonment in Florence by Mussolini as part of a general round up of immigrant Jews, the Kahanes moved to Cephalonia, Greece, Renée Kahane's birthplace. From there they managed to emigrate to the US in 1939. From 1939-1941 they lived in Los Angeles. In 1941 they moved to the University of Illinois when Henry took up a position, first, in the department of Spanish, Italian, and Portuguese and then in the department of Linguistics (which he founded). ' The sentence 'From 1939-1941 they lived in Los Angeles. ', first of all, doesn't really provide any substantial information about Renée Kahane--it's an irrelevant side note that needs contextualizing: what did she do in Los Angeles? Why is this noteworthy? Furthermore, everything except the last sentence in the above quote is irrelevant to her career. These sentences belong in another section called 'Early Life'.
 * 2) Looks fine to me. She died in 2002, so nothing about her new publications or research needs to be noted on.
 * 3) There needs to be more context for a lot some of the information. Like stated above, some sentences provide merely surface-level information that leave the reader asking for more. Another example is in these sentences: 'Renée Toole Kahane studied Romance philology at the Universities of Leipzig and Berlin, receiving her PhD in 1931 under the supervision of Ernst Gamillscheg (de). In 1931, she married Henry R. Kahane, whom she had met in 1927 when they were fellow PhD students in Berlin. They became lifelong intellectual partners. ' What is the point of this last sentence, that they 'became lifelong intellectual partners'? The author already said that they were married--and the rest of the article does the job of explaining how they performed research together. I think there are just a few sentences in this article that are unnecessary. Furthermore, there should plainly be more information about Renée Kahane! Like, what are her specific contributions to the field? What is so interesting that would make somebody want to google search her name in the first place? These conflicts should be resolved, if only briefly, by adding more information into the article.

Evaluating Tone


 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?


 * 1) The article seems neutral. Nothing stands out as heavily biased.
 * 2) Nope, looks good. But, again, there isn't a lot of information--not much to take a side on.

Evaluating Sources


 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?


 * 1) Links work fine, but some of them are in a different language. Can't verify for these links if they support the claims made in the article.
 * 2) There is one factual statement in the article that is not cited, which is: 'After obtaining their PhDs, Henry and Renée Kahane moved to Florence where they spent several years collecting a large corpus of Venetian loanwords used in Greek dialects.' Maybe this means that the source for this fact is at the end of the next sentence. If not, this sentence should be cited with a reference or removed.

Checking the talk page

Now take a look at how others are talking about this article on the talk page.


 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

There is no talk page, unfortunately.