User:Thealexjr100/Meridian (novel)/Jessmanners Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thealexjr100


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Thealexjr100/Meridian_%28novel%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Meridian (novel)
 * Meridian (novel)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

So far the information in the lead consists of the theme of Meridian and it does a good job talking about a specific theme. It does need a more concise introductory sentence, and a brief description of what the article is about should be added.

Content

So far the content is relevant to the topic and it does talk about the racism Meridian faced so it does deal with a equity gap.

Tone and Balance

I believe the article is written in a neutral tone. Some sentences could be on the verge of being bias, but I do not believe that it actually is.

Sources and References

There were no references added to the draft so far, so I could not check to see if they were up to date or if they worked.

Organization

The information is organized into one section, but I did find some grammatical errors. There was a comma added to the first sentence between racism and through that did not need to be there. In the second sentence after "however," there should be a comma added. Also, the word "continue" should be changed to "continued." Other than that, the content is well organized.

Images and Media

There were no images or media added to the draft.

Overall Impressions

So far, the content added is good, a brief explanation of what the article is about should be added to the lead section. The draft consists of the theme of Meridian, which there is not a lot of information in the existing article regarding theme so it is adding new content. Some grammatical errors that I previously wrote about in another section should be fixed, but other than that, the draft is good.