User:Thebiggestshrimp/Black box theater/Eclipsed Moonlight Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing work done by Thebiggestshrimp.
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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Content - In relation to the added content it looks like what is added fits in with what is already existing. That being said, the sources it is coming from are a bit dated (one source is dated at 2010).

Tone - The tone of everything added is quite neutral. What has been added simply states more facts about the possibilities with black box theaters. It doesn't seem to favor anything.

Sources and References - I think you need to properly add the sources in and cite them in-line. You are seeming to mirror MLA but there are better ways to do it that uses wikipedia's built in resources. Check the exercise on this for a reminder on how to do it, that's how I did it for my article. Additionally, if possible, I would try to see if there are anymore modern sources, but I know how hard that is to come by. The links to them work, but they need to do more.

Organization - In terms of the content being well placed, I think it is fine. I think there is one grammatical error in this sentence at the underline: The space within black box theaters may also serve to try and separate the space implied space between the audience and actors, while it technically still remains physically there. Besides that everything looks good in terms of grammar.

Overall:

Overall, I think the additions make the article a bit stronger. That being said, there is definitely more to be done in terms of finding sources and referencing them throughout the article. I like how the added portions help to strengthen the intimate nature of black-box theaters. And if you fix the errors in regards to the grammar and references, you should be fine for those additions.