User:Thegayginger/Star Vega (psychologist)/AlyssaKayS Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thegayginger


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Thegayginger/Star Vega (psychologist) - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Star Vega (psychologist) - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead- Wordy sentence. A lot of information in a short space. It should be double the length. It's too short. Also a nice lead sentence would be nice. Content- Not enough content it should be 3 times the length. Add more interesting facts and filler information. Tone and Balance- Neutral. Sources- Where are your References? There don't appear to be any. Organization- you should change structure. Otherwise fine. Images- there were no images. Overall- Just needs to be longer and uncompress it. There is a lot of information in there it doesn't necassarily have to be back to back.