User:Thekeith10/The Running Man (1987 film)/Bbartonshaw SFSU Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thekeith10


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Draft: Running Man (1987 Film)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Running Man (1987 Film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: There is some initial confusion with the content on your sandbox draft. "Schwarzenegger replaced Christopher Reeve soon after"... after what? For your next round of editing, I would suggest you copy/paste the entire article and editing in the sandbox, rather than writing hanging sentences to fit in later.

There is a lot to do with the existing Lead section, such as changing the syntax from the formal to the academic, that wouldn't take extra source material inasmuch as it would be a simple re-write for an overall polish. Re-writing the section about the copyright infringement lawsuit would have been worthwhile as well. There is just enough information to seem like a suggestion of context, but its lackadaisical and poorly written altogether, and would have been a great starting point in editing. For media ideas, perhaps a screenshot of the video game adaptation, or a screenshot of the film itself, if that's possible.

Overall: I would suggest you adopt the entire existing article into your sandbox so you can make changes you can see coming together. You have very little, and that's fine, but there are a lot of wholes and loose threads of interesting facts in the original article that you could latch onto. Editing isn't always about adding content. Shaping content is important too.