User:Theplayer28/Maladaptive daydreaming/Halleparker Peer Review

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Username: Theplayer28
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Theplayer28/Maladaptive daydreaming
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Maladaptive daydreaming

Evaluate the drafted changes
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include in your lead the topics that you will be writing about in your article.

This sentance "The person may begin to tune out from personal interactions, studying, and work" sounds off to me, I think it might be the way you used the term "tune out"

The content added in the body is a great overview of how to stop maladaptive dreaming, but i feel like it needs some sources to back up the content.

Maybe include information about how maladaptive dreaming affects differnet people like children and adults or male vs female.

need more content in the body of the article, like the differences between all types of dreaming to compare to maladaptive dreaming.