User:Thepyrites/Gulf of Mexico hypoxia/Perso269 Peer Review

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Thepyrites


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 * Editing User:Thepyrites/Gulf of Mexico hypoxia - Wikipedia


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I really liked your article. You provided a really nice overview of the topic and supplied some great information with a good writing style. To start off, I think you had a good lead or overview section, it provided some initial information and went over almost everything in the article. After the overview section the formatting changed a bit with the headers no longer being underlined, I wasn't sure if that was intentional or not. Also the organization of the first three paragraphs after the overview was a bit confusing. They made sense but seemed sort of disconnected maybe if you added them under a new header grouped them somehow. Otherwise, the content in each of them was great. Everything else flowed really well and I thought that it was fairly comprehensive and didn't underrepresent any section. All of your sources seemed to be high quality as well. The only other critique I have is that at times in your article you would have several sentences of information without citations backing it up. Maybe you just got all of the information in a paragraph from one or two sources but in that case maybe just recite them a few more times. But overall great job, I really enjoyed your article.