User:Therealethanmayfield/W. Ron Allen/Dezhengl Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Therealethanmayfield


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Therealethanmayfield/W._Ron_Allen?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?

This is a first draft, there are no updates yet.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

The article starts with the personal info section and then moves onto the biography section. There is no introductory sentence.


 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

It looks like the biography section contains a description of the article's major sections, but it's not brief. Consider removing some details.


 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?

Informations discussed in the biography section are all covered in the article.


 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

I think the biography section is overly detailed, perhaps mentioning the key points would be enough. Also, should move this section to the top as the lead section.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Yes, the content is relevant to the topic.


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

Yes, the content added is up-to-date, there is a current day involvement section.


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

No, all the information covered in the biography section is being discussed.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?

The content is neutral as well as the tone.


 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

No, there are no claims that appear heavily biased toward one position.


 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

No, there are no viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented.


 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

No, the content is simply informative and is not biased toward one side.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)

Yes, the content accurately reflect the cited sources.


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?

Yes, the sources are thorough and reflect the available literature.


 * Are the sources current?

Yes, the sources are current.


 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors?

Yes, sources are written by a diverse spectrum of authors.


 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)

Not that I could find.


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Yes, the links do work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

Yes, the content added is concise and easy to read.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

The content does contain a few grammatical errors, recommand running the article through some checks.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Yes, the content is divided into two sections

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?

Yes


 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?

Not sure, the structure looks fine


 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

No, the articel currently does not have any links toward other articles.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

This is a new article


 * What are the strengths of the content added?

The content added provides an overview of the topic


 * How can the content added be improved?

Perhaps divide the text in one section into several paragraphs, right now it seems too long.