User:Thesi043/Sahnish Scouts/JHolman43 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thesi043


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Thesi043/Sahnish_Scouts?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * created article

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a wonderful article you are creating, thank you.

Under the History heading, the 's does not need to go after Arikara (two instances). The "in defense" and "in assistance" sentences are a bit unclear to read at first. Under the Mission heading, "The Sahnish Scouts belief" should be "Scout's belief" and the end of the sentence feels out of order in some way... maybe flip represented and looked for around, or find better wording for "looked for." Under the Notable Cases heading, toward the end, there should be a space so it reads 1 pm, and the dates need commas. The inclusion of a background for why the scouts exist is great! The created article does a great job of including brief info on everything the reader should be aware of while learning about the topic.

The main thing I noticed is that you might need a lead to briefly summarize everything brought up. The image included is very useful, but the state and country maybe should be included, and the description maybe a bit more detailed. The tone feels appropriate and neutral, excluding a few instances of wordiness. The article is very well-organized. Great job with links. Your sources seem exhaustive enough, varied, very current, appropriate (aside from the Facebook page since it is a primary source, which Wikipedia for some reason does not like).