User:Theyellowbrickroad/Criminal justice reform/Emph0218 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Theyellowbrickroad


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Theyellowbrickroad/Criminal_justice_reform?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Criminal justice reform

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, the corrections and additions were very well written. Everything was on topic and related to the source, nothing was biased, and almost all the sources connected to the information. A small edit I found was under the “Police Reform” section, switch the word organizes to organized. This was just a small typo. Under “Community Mediators,” a comma should be added after practice. The correction would be, “this is often called violence interruption, and is practiced, for example, by Cure Violence.” For example is a nonessential phrase, requiring a comma before and after. I would also recommend adding more details to the “Alternatives to Police” section. What is stated now is a great start, but looking at the source used, I think a little more information could be added to each alternative. The only issue for a source I found was that I did not see how the third source connected to what it is linked to. If it is somewhere in the link after opening other things, I recommend going to where you found the information and linking that part of the page. The last suggestion I have is changing the wording in the first sentence under “Banning Random Sources.” Jurisdictions does not seem like the right word to use in that spot. I would change it to something along the lines of “In some countries, including the US and UK, jurisdictions give their police force…”