User:Thomasdquigley/Oyster toadfish/ClosingtheGap Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thomas Quigley


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Thomasdquigley/Oyster toadfish
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Oyster toadfish

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the article is really well written. It is digestible and at the level that non-fish biologists (me) can easily understand. I also think the use of short simple sentences add to the neutrality of the work. The phrase "bury themselves up to their eyeballs in sand" was an exciting phrase to use in the article.

I think filling in citations and examples would greatly benefit the article. It would allow people to easily access the basics of oyster toad fish and then dive deeper if they were interested. There are a few phrases you use that hint at more detailed science (e.g., "Early research on toadfish contributed to our general understanding of embryonic development.") that I think should have a short follow up sentence with a brief overview explaining an aspect of the current research in that field. It would again to help point readers to further insights into the Oyster Toadfish.

Adding a segment relating to evolution would be a great addition. The article does a great job with giving basic biology and life history, but does not tie in some aspect of their evolution or how the toadfish can be used to further our understanding of evolution (though maybe this is not possible without diving in to too much literature!). Also, is it possible to add a photo of them buried in the ground?

I think the author wrote this in an incredibly accessible way and I need to incorporate this writing style into my article.