User:Thomasdquigley/Oyster toadfish/NCcunyevo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thomasdquigley


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Thomasdquigley/Oyster_toadfish?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Oyster toadfish

Evaluate the drafted changes
The author of this article does an excellent job outlining elements of the unique life history in the Oyster Toadfish, and includes some valuable specific facts to supplement general understanding of these elements. An example of such would be the section on Physiology, where the author states that these fish use their swim bladder to generate their mating calls, and then continues in the next portion of the section to speak more specifically about how they contract their muscles "as much as 300 times per second more quickly than fast-twitch muscles in most vertebrates" giving a more specific frame of reference that is interesting and clear.

I would like to see the author include some further details to the life history section, particularly early life of these fish and their non-mating ecology. Additionally being able to put numbers to many of the life history claims would flesh out the article substantially.

The author also includes notes on the scientific importance of these fish, particularly for embryonic development and hearing, so it would be excellent to include some specific conclusions from these studies, and cite them here. Understanding exactly what these fish have contributed to science as a model organism would be a really interesting sub-section for the article!

I think the current most important changes for this article would be fleshing out specific values for their facts, as well as adding sources and wikilinks to all of their claims and specific terms. Outside of these technical changes, expanding on their contribution to science as mentioned above, as well as expanding on what elements of their physiology make them unique, would strengthen the article substantially. Perhaps including elements on how their body plan makes them great ambush hunters, or elements about how they develop their camouflage would be very interesting!

After reading this article I definitely feel that I need to incorporate more interesting or gripping facts about my topic and system- including fun and interesting elements like the note about how quickly they contract their muscles made the article enjoyable to read, and gave me a nice takeaway even further than broad concepts.