User:Thomsaleme/Eugene J. de Sabla, Jr., Teahouse and Tea Garden/JasperFLugo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Thomasaleme


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Thomsaleme/Eugene_J._de_Sabla,_Jr.,_Teahouse_and_Tea_Garden?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead of the article gives good information on the article to come, but the second sentence is a bit wordy and could be cut down. Maybe remove the portion about Makota Hagiwara and simply state when it was built and the fact that it's a host to many local events. The organization of the article is great and follows and logical flow. The layout section in article provides good information. The first sentence of the "layout" section is a little wonky. I would move the #5 citation to the end of the sentence and insert and a comma after the quote. I have no clue if this is correct or not, but the "see also" section has /'s instead of spacing between each entry. Overall, this article is fantastic. You bring some great sources into it and have good organization.