User:ThoomBOY/Malinvestment/Cornishgamehen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ThoomBOY


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ThoomBOY/Malinvestment?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Malinvestment

Evaluate the drafted changes
The first sentence should be strictly the definition of "malinvestment," and it takes a bit to get there - it's also grammatically is hard to understand. The phrase "random investment" comes off as informal. The last sentence is redundant.

The content itself is good. It explains malinvestment well. I think the text is just all lumped together in the sandbox, but will be going in different sections in the article.