User:Tiazjane/4B (movement)/Sonadav. Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tiazjane


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tiazjane/4B (movement)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

4B (movement)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer review

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * The Lead has not been titled as "Lead" and should be done so for readers to be able to better identify where it is. It has however been updated from the original Wikipedia entry and sounds more organized. I would recommend a quick mention of the other sections so readers will know what the Wikipedia apge will be covering.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * The lead does include a clear and concise introductory sentence.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * The lead does not include a brief description of the article's major sections. I would recommend adding it in the order that the Wikipedia page is set up.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * The lead does not include information that is not present in the article
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The Lead is concise and not overly detailed.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The content added is relevant to the topic.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * The content is up to date. This is a very recent movement that occurred in 2016
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * There is no content that does not belong. For the digital movement section you could provide more information if available about how the digital movement began and continues to change in response to societal and political action.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * Yes, this is a topic addressing the content gap of women in Wiki. It is representing the South Korean women and their struggles in regards to gender inequality in 2016.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content is neutral.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * There are no claims that appear heavily biased towards a particular position.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No viewpoint is overrepresented or underrepresented.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * The content does not attempt to persuade the reader.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * All content is backed up by reliable secondary sources.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.)
 * The content does accurately reflect what the cited sources say.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * The sources are thorough and reflect the available literature.
 * Are the sources current?
 * The sources are current.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * The sources are written by a diverse spectrum of authors.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.)
 * This is a very new movement that occurred in 2016 so it might be difficult to find a lot of sources. I would recommend looking at Google Scholar or Google Books for any additional possible entries. A good add on could be more dates and mention of how the movement got recognition in 2019.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * The links work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * The content is clear and easy to read, but there are some grammatical errors.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * The content does have grammatical errors such as the lack of capitalization in the beginning of a sentence and lack of punctuation. For example the Digital Movement section was missing these. I would recommend running the entire writing through Grammarly to be able to catch errors such as these.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The content is well-organized but to make it better I recommend mentioning the sections in the lead section in the order that the sections are being introduced for better organization.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Images were not added

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * The draft is an add on to an existing article. It is not a new article.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * The content added has improved the overall quality of the article. It is more complete.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The content added provides more facts and background about the 4B movement, describing its purpose, history, and social impact. It provides more detail the the previous minor paragraph that was on Wikipedia before.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * To improve the content, I recommend mentioning briefly the sections you addressed in your Lead section and creating a heading titled Lead for readers to be able to easily find that section. It would also be beneficial to mention the section in the same order that you displayed them in Wikipedia on your Lead. There were some grammatical issues such as punctuation and capitalization that you can easily fix by running your writing through Grammarly. It will catch these minor errors without you having to look for them meticulously. Also if possible providing more information on how the Digital Movement began and continued to change in response to societal and political action would be a great addition to that section. I also noticed in the lead you mentioned that the movement gained recognition in 2019. If its possible you can elaborate in the history section as to why it gained more recognition in 2019 compare to when it began in 2016. Mentioning more dates if there are any in the history section would also help the reader better understand the story behind the movement. Overall it was a very interesting topic to read and learn.
 * Additional Questions
 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources?
 * There are 6 reliable sources present.
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material?
 * The topic does link to feminism movements because the 4B movement was a South Korean women's movement that was fighting sexual inequality.
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article?
 * Yes.
 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?
 * (*see "overall impressions").